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An Analysis of A Winning Sales Letter
By Yanik
Silver Check out the links to all Yank's
Products at the bottom of this page
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Many people say they can
spot a good letter when they see it, but the problem is when it
comes down to writing one, they simply freeze up. That's why I want
to take you behind the scenes of a successful sales letter I wrote
and illustrate the thinking that goes into writing a killer letter
that generated a healthy 3810% ROI. This letter sold all of the
clients overstock merchandise and they even created a waiting list.
You'll find my comments
in the side notes below so let's get started...
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Can You Get A New $8,000
Power Table For $417?
------Side Note
Comments------ First off, the headline is a grabber and makes
people want to read more. Anyone interested in your product at a
bargain price would certainly continue reading. ------End
Comments------
Read The Amazing Facts To
Find Out How...
------Side Note
Comments------ Next, the subhead tells prospects that the answer
is right inside this letter if they keep reading. ------End
Comments------
Dear Friend,
Yes, it's absolutely
true. You can really replace your old, worn-out exam table and only
pay $417 out of your pocket (But only if you are one of the first 2
people to respond to this letter.)
Let me explain.
------Side Note
Comments------ Your first sentence is absolutely critical to your
letter. If your first sentence doesn't make people want to keep
reading, you can expect your letter to end up in the circular file.
So make sure it keeps their interest piqued and follow up on the
headline promise in the first sentence.
In the first sentence I
reiterate the fact that yes they really can get a brand new power
table for such a low price. The second sentence I throw in a little
scarcity right at the beginning of the letter so they won't just
toss this letter aside for further reading. ------End
Comments------
Last April, our little
company took a big gamble and signed up for a power table promotion.
In order to get on the promotion we had to agree to take 3 power
tables - nearly $15,000. (And for a small company like us, that's a
lot of money to be tied up in inventory).
Only one of those 3
tables were sold - so there are still 2 left.
------Side Note
Comments------ The next paragraph I begin to explain the story of
why we're selling this product at such a bargain price. I've
discovered that telling people the truth and giving a reason why is
actually one of the most powerful psychological motivators to
action. ------End Comments------
And My Problem Is Your
Opportunity
------Side Note
Comments------ This subhead turns the letter back around to
what's in it for the reader. Everyone is always silently asking
themselves "So what?" and "Who cares?". You've got to keep the focus
on what the reader will gain from the letter. ------End
Comments------
In order to move these
last 2 tables I've decided to do something somewhat bold and a
little daring.
First, you should know
that the manufacturer's promotion of these power tables ends June
30th. And any unsold inventory I have could be sold to another
dealer at wholesale.
But instead of doing
that, I would rather sell you the table at a wholesale price and
gain your goodwill.
------Side Note
Comments------ Here I explain how and why I'm willing to make a
sensational deal. ------End Comments------
The regular price for a
XXX power table is $8,000 but during this promotion they were on
sale for $5,375 (which is a pretty good deal anyway).
But until July 15th (I've
extended the offer 2 weeks), you can buy one of our last 2 tables
for just $4,897. That's a savings of over $3,100.00
------Side Note
Comments------ I introduce the special offer and the reason why
we're selling the product at such a discount. That's a key point,
because unless you give people a believable reason for the reduced
price they won't believe you. Nobody thinks you're lowering the
price because you're "such a nice guy" so let them in on the reason
behind your offer. ------End Comments------
What? I promised you
could get a power table for only $417 and here's how...
------Side Note
Comments------ I answer an anticipated objection here since I
promised they could get the table for only $417. ------End
Comments------
Here's How To Get That
New Power Table For Almost "Zip" By buying a power table, you can
qualify for a 50% tax credit under section 44 of the Americans with
Disabilities Act. That's right Fifty Percent! All because a power
table will glide up and down to accommodate disabled and handicapped
patients.
And here's what else. You
can also take the amount of the power table and deduct it off your
taxes using Section 179. (That is if you haven't spent over $18,000
on capital equipment this year.)
That's not all, here are
a few more incentives for you: We will give you a $150 trade-in for
your old table (or you can donate it to charity for another tax
break). And add an extra 2-year warranty ($1,000 value), plus, we'll
pick-up your old table and deliver the new one all for free!
Pretty good, right? Wait,
I have even better news for you...
------Side Note
Comments------ Here I've explained each of the incentives and how
they can really get the table for such a low cost. Plus added in a
few extra bonuses and now I'll another bonus to really increase
their desire. ------End Comments------
You Can Pay In 3 Easy
Installments With Zero Interest We'll break up your payments into 3
easy installments, spread thirty days apart.
Why You Must Act Before
July 15th First, I doubt if these tables will still be around until
July 15th because the first 2 doctors that put their deposits down
will take them. And when they're gone this offer expires.
But even if they are
still here (highly unlikely at this bargain price) this offer has to
expire anyway because we will be shipping out these tables to other
dealers in the area.
------Side Note
Comments------ I bring back the deadline here and scarcity again.
So not only do they have a limit on the number of units available,
but there is also a time deadline. This is a double whammy to get
people to take action immediately. ------End Comments------
Here's What You Should Do
Now
Pick up your phone and
dial xxx-xxxx and reserve one of these last 2 tables with your
credit card. Or in case, you're still undecided call us and ask for
some more information to be faxed to you.
Otherwise, you'll be
giving up the ease and convenience of having a power table at this
bargain price. I really hope you're one of the 2 lucky doctors who
decide to take advantage of this golden opportunity.
------Side Note
Comments------ In this closing paragraph I give readers a little
pain by mentioning what they'll be missing if they don't act on this
offer. ------End Comments------
Sincerely, XXXX
P.S. Hurry! This letter
is being sent to 1,283 local doctors and this offer is strictly
limited to the first 2 people who respond.
------Side Note
Comments------ The P.S. is your last place to help prospects make
a buying decision. People go from the headline in a letter to the
signature to the P.S., so your P.S. should be powerful.
Here I introduce even
more scarcity. I let them know exactly how many people (specifics
sell) are receiving this letter and it makes the limited quantity
seem even more limited since so many other people are getting this
same announcement. ------End Comments------
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I guarantee by using the
same elements, I just illustrated, you'll see your next sales letter
produce incredible results.
©2000 Surefire Marketing,
Inc.
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